descriptive writting

I've been working on descriptive writing.I've tried to give a picture in the mind of the reader.

Improving Google draw

My teacher gave me feedback that my Google Drawing could be even better for a Year 6.  I used images with png at the end and they don't have stuff behind them.  Do you think it looks better?

                       1st go at google draw                                                2nd go at google draw
  

My Dangerous situation

We had to think of a dangerous situation that we could use to help us with making a Google drawing and writing. This is mine. Do you think it's dangerous?

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